Critical Response 1, Week 1

Response to Sydney Bolding's Improv 2, Week 1:

There's a great deal to admire here sonically, imagistically,like "who found the last of your breaths" or the clever play on your last name "bolding". This also seems to be doing a lot of work with juggling and interconnective tissue--the grandfather's hestiation to write his name coupled with, by end, the speaker's own inability to seize the pen, "paper and pen, unbound". There's also a great sensuality and depth to the grandfather that I would like to see further fleshed out (answer why--why flea markets and women? Why the hesitation?)On another note, in terms of juggling the "you" of the coffin in the beginning, it seems to curiously disappear and, as it stands, function more as a vehicle towards the discovered subject--the grandfather--as opposed to functioning as an additional plate for the poem to perform.